by Ganthan » Wed Sep 14, 2011 3:33 pm
Now that I've sat on it for a while longer, I don't think I really like the way the last adult panel turned out. At the time it did seem funny in a slapstick kind of way, but the humor wore off quickly and now I'm stuck with the uncomfortable image of a leg doing something it isn't supposed to. I know weres have regeneration and all that jazz, but we don't, and now every time I see that panel I cringe.
First of all, it took me a minute to figure out what I was even looking at, which has always been PitW's biggest problem in my opinion. If you block the bottom half of the panel it superficially does look like a hand and arm reaching up and grabbing her boobs. Then I see Danny down there laying the other way and I'm just like, "Say what now?" The dialog doesn't really match up to it, either. "I didn't say your hands could stop," indicates that he had already been fondling her breasts up until then. Why would she, in the heat of the moment, lean forward and yank his foot up? This makes it look like you followed Kris's written dialog but not his description of the scene.
Second, while it is indeed funnier this way for a bit, it sacrifices a great deal of good old arousing fun. I actually found Butch's near rape of Peter more arousing than this, and it wasn't even supposed to be arousing. Knocked out, kidnapped and forced upon him without consent is bad and all, but at least all the parts were treated in a decent way. She certainly didn't feel the need to nearly twist his leg out of its socket.
Lately I've noticed that Ben has been taking the script into his own hands more and more frequently. Ben, dude, I love your art, both here and on furaffinity. I do think you have funny jokes and references. You definitely understand the youth of today better than Kris does. However, none of this means that you can write a better adult comic than he can.
Ben, for the comic's sake, for Kris's sake, and for your own sake because you have better things to do than redraw pages, can you try to refrain from so many impromptu script changes? Please? I figured you and Kris were supposed to discuss possible changes over before just up and doing them. Kris doesn't deserve any more headaches than he already gets.
Now gimme a brohoof.
I believe in no God, no invisible man in the sky.
-Andrew Ryan, Bioshock
...and don't forget the ponies.